The title is really eye-catching and pulled me in. I like the simplicity of this piece and I think that is flows well too. The short verses build up a specific atmosphere that shows that the speaker is yearning to meet who she/he is talking about. I have to admit that I do not think that the amount of full stops is needed as bad because the poem seems somewhat dramatic as it is. Overall I think you penned a good write here.

Thanks for your Comment , glad you liked it