Comments : BEST FREN

  • 12 years ago

    by L

    What I like about your pieces is the emotion that one can feel from it.
    I found this poem to be sad. I literally wanted to cry, it most be heartbreaking to see your best friend whom you love getting marry.
    This poem shows TRUE love for the author wishes her beloved a happy married life despise not being with her. T_T

    My only suggestions are to revise your pieces when you finish writing. The reader will appreciate it so much. :)

    I got a secret
    that's buried deep within me
    like an overfilled water balloon
    ready to burst at any moment.

    I have been nursing it
    since the day I saw you
    smiling at me with those
    beautiful eyes staring at me,
    but the eyes I thought were piercing me
    were actually looking past me.

    You said I am your BEST FREN"
    and my heart started beating
    faster than light can travel
    but then she came and
    you whispered to her "I love you"

    I swallowed my words back
    I hid it deep inside
    but today as I stand
    here in the church
    my heart is ready to explode
    but all I could say was
    "happy married life my FREN"