Oh wow! This is an absolutely great poem! The flow is perfect same with the rhyme. Your word choice brilliant, i can't do nothing but compliment you for this great piece. Some might say it's too long i guess but to me it's not. The length was fine since you were telling a story without it getting boring. I've reread it twiece already because i enjoyed it so much. The emotions are so pure. It's definately a heartfelt write and i do not think that it could be any better! Keep up the good work! Thanks for sharing :)