Wow.. this is filled with emotions. I liked flow and rhyme and the substance was stunning. This is a really heartfelt poem, though i'd recommend you to present all lines as you did with the third part. I think that'd be more inviting other than that i don't have anything to complain about :)

I agree with jenni what an amazing piece hope to see more soon

I absolutly love it its obviously filled with lots of emotion its beautiful

You have expressed your feelings/emotions really well in this poem. It is very well written.

Corina