Comments : Oh!tis so bad!

  • 9 years ago

    by Dark Secrets

    I liked this... I could feel how hopelessness overcomes a person at times. and how that feeling makes you feel like you can't do what you want, but you really can.

    "when you wait for the chance,
    yet like dew it dries and vanishes by the noon's scorching sun"
    ^ This line is my favourite! It just says it all.

    I don't like the repetition of the title though... it sounds jazz to me and I don't like jazz.. Though it might sound better to others<<< it's a personal thing.

  • 3 years ago

    by mossgirl19

    I couldn't agree more... But surely this piece is good... Loved it

    • 3 years ago

      by The Po whet

      Thanks again for your comment on this piece from my archives ( lol) ,I so much appreciate .