Simple poem showin emotions wel ..bt length shud be lil more..i liked it a lot..diff frm d ones u usualy write..

I love it! Very deep and thoughtful! Emotions skipped around and kept me interested! Nice work kiddo! :)

How can anyone pull away after reading this. Very deep indeed. I think adding Don't at the beginning of each verse gave it a nice touch ..

One remark, the very first line, i think you should remove the "Don't" and add something instead like:

Don't-
pull away yet.
This is something valuable
that could never be replaced.

Again its inly a suggestion :)

5/5

Don't
Ever stop writing sara, you're very skilled. Such a joy to read.

No matter what you write their is a softness to it, I see you as a gentle soul from just your words.
Excellent write as always
Connie

Great!

Don't -
lie to yourself and
pretend like you're happy,
when you're hurting inside.

^^

if only they would be courageous enough to show themselves..

I feel a person who dares show their weaknesses is the strongest kind.

This poem is one I can relate to very well. It might surprise you that some things never change, no matter how old you are, the same kind of situations keep on repeating themselves between men and women..maybe we come from different planets after all!..;0)

5/5 Ingrid

This poem is all so true :)

Don't pull away -
hang on to me instead.
I have a strong grip
and will carry you to bliss.

-I love this part(:.
Wanting him to hold on you instead of pulling away so that you guys can last it together.

Emotion poured out, you could feel what you wrote.
Love it :)
5/5