I found this interesting. I think the first verse is probably my favourite, and this line:
'You called yourself
Artemis, running
with lions and elands and impala but
you were my deer.'

Overall I enjoyed it and think it was a good write. I was wondering about the title though, should it be 'taming artemis?' I think there is a typo as it is. Well done though on the poem

Colm

Ah yes, thanks for that, i have no idea who "Artemins" might be. Thanks for the comment.

A very good poem. Ill be honest, its hard to say what you were talking about, but nonetheless a very good piece. You are very talanted. Thank you.

You know, with the quality you write, it's really hard for me to write in-depth comments. Sometimes I read poems and only think: ooooooooooooooooooooooooo. I'll try, though. =p

The pace and tone of this poem is certainly different from your September poem. It has something wild, which I am sure was your intention. The first impression I had of this piece, was all reflected in your title: taming someone who's godly (perhaps acting "above you") and uncaring. Perhaps this is some sort of critique on someone in your life, or perhaps this was just a way to paint a random mood you had at the time. I don't know, but either way, it's fascinating.

I was also surprised by your note (you do like to surprise your readers with notes, don't you =p), since I didn't even notice you were changing the tenses. You managed to glue it all without leaving stains. This whole piece reads like a short artistic movie.

One hing that left me wondering was your use of dashes, instead of plain commas. I've read this poem several times and only now do I see the effect of those dashes. They speed up the pace, making the blood in your veins run faster. It's truly a piece full of action, and I like that.

Another thing was the fact that you didn't capitalise "I", in the second stanza. I'm not sure whether this was intentional or not, but I felt like this connected to my first interpretation of this piece. That you're speaking of a person that acts as if he's higher than you, and perhaps you're trying to emphasise that by making yourself smaller with a small "I".

I'm sorry I couldn't offer much help here, but I am truly in awe. I am sure that if you picked out some of your poems, you'd easily be published. But then again, what do I know, I am just an amazed reader. :D

A very unique piece. You totally pulled it off. It does have a quality which one cannot overlook , and yet it makes you ponder.

Concur with all favourable critiques.
I'm not fond of incoporating alternate words (though I often am guilty of it myself). This is yet another fully mature poem with a somewhat lyrical and otherwordly atmosphere. Very enjoyable