This was a really good piece the words flowed really well beautiful x

I liked it. The wording was good. It was a good length and the flow was good. It was different.

gave it 5/5

My sweets,
I absolutely loved it.
Deffo nominated the next week.
This was sad yet romantic, the words were brilliantly used, incorparated so well.
absolutely awesome!!
The flow was awesome, And imagery vivid.
One of my faves
5/5

love
Tara
xx

Connie, this is a masterpiece, like da Vinci's The Last Supper. And like it, this was beauifully painted with fine words. You used sadness as a medium to express the emotions of someone who feels love and that in my opinion makes it more interesting. I really love the openning lines, and the middle too, well, and the ending, hell! I love all of it, lol. Excellent. :D

Connie :)

Amazing flow, and the title is BRILLIANT!

5/5

Just everything is good about this poem..and 5 sweets from me too..

Beautifull!
awesome flow and use of words!

i wouldnt change a thing!
5/5 from me

Amazing job! I love it so so much! I agree with everyone that commented before me because this is absolutely amazing, and there is no reason for me to state the obvious while it has all ready been stated so clearly before

Pieces of a splintered
heart litter pristine
beaches once pure
and white.

and

His love bankrupt
her fragile spirit.
Leaving a barren shell
colored in emptiness.

Awh! Moving. It is subtle and precisely mature, like ones hands swaying to and fro pouring the heart onto the lines whilst the eyes just gazing.

Beautifully written, I love the words you use to describe the girl within this piece. Amazing job.