Comments : Darkness at the end of the tunnel

  • 12 years ago

    by believeinlove87

    Wow Chris,
    This is a breath taking poem.
    I loved every last piece of it.

    Out from his trench coat is a rope already fit for his neck,
    He finds high beam to wrap it around and a stool to stand,
    Looking at all his accomplishments and failures one last time,
    He cries a single tear,
    With his finally breath he says, "Mother forgive me",
    His eye sight turns black,
    The curtain closes,

    This is filled with such strong emotion, as you say goodbye to your mom, a single tear down your cheek.
    Effing Amazing :).
    My favorite poem of yours<3
    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by TheDarkCloudBehindthePoet

    :) thank u..u almost had me in tears with ur comment lol