This isn't particularly my favorite but it was good :)

I think it depicts the fears of our own that haunt and chain us in some way. It was clear and hear pounding for anyone that knows about the monster fear that lives within..Excellent
You need to edit out the funny squiggles grr I hate those things :-)

Connie

I love the title, kinda prepares the reader that theyre in for some heavy stuff, heavy sadness to be precise. Idk, but dont you think its kinda better sounding if you edit the first line to- SHROUDED by A shadow, instead of- Shroud by shadow? Anyways, all in all, its an enjoyable read. Good job friend.

I love the title, kinda prepares the reader that theyre in for some heavy stuff, heavy sadness to be precise. Idk, but dont you think its kinda better sounding if you edit the first line to- SHROUDED by A shadow, instead of- Shroud by shadow? Anyways, all in all, its an enjoyable read. Good job friend.