Comments : You say, I see

  • 10 years ago

    by Innocent Fairy

    Wow great poem and very inspring and great for others in need of help i really felt this poem and at times relate so i understand this and this poem is so wonderful...i really loved it get up the good work :) :) 10/10

  • 10 years ago

    by Lofallenve

    You wrote this beautifully. <3

  • 10 years ago

    by L

    It's great.

    I just recommend to made the sentences in each stanza together.
    For example:

    But please,
    I'm begging you,
    Stop hurting yourself,
    It's leading nowhere,
    Except to your death.

    It will take less space and in my opinion will look more appealing to the readers. :) By the way, that's my favorite stanza.
    Very well done.

  • 10 years ago

    by H. Elizabeth

    Wow, probably my favorite poem. Ever.
    I'm dead serious. I read this and I realized how much this related to my life...Like, it's spot on. Exactly how my life is right now.
    I don't want to sound like one of those stupid posers, or attention hogs. Just want to let you know why I love this poem so much.

    My favorite part throughout the poem is probably,

    "You blame everything on yourself,
    You think everything is your fault,
    You think you're the one to pay,
    And for that matter you are dying.

    You are destroying youself,
    And you think socially.

    But socially you are alright,
    You have a lot of friends,
    But you still think you are the outsider,
    And that everyone hates you."

    This simply explains how one person can seem so happy, but yet deep down they are dying inside, deep down they feel like an outcast, deep down they hate themselves.

    Absolutely, amazing, fantastic job,
    ~Hannah E