Comments : Destiny's Calling

  • 12 years ago

    by believeinlove87

    The fire has sparked my soul
    and the adventure begins.

    I love this part:)
    But the whole poem is good. You can see it play out, as life starts to drag you,pushing you towards your destiny :)
    Great Job
    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Jenni

    The fire has sparked my soul
    excitement
    happiness
    has joined this new journey

    ^ I really like this positive start because it allows the reader to get into a specific mood already. I thought that your words were well chosen too, though I'd suggest you to add some punctuation as that might make it clearer.

    Fate has taken course
    as I give in
    to destiny's calling

    ^ This stanza shows that even though the new situation will bring good things into your life you're still afraid to let it happen, because it might turn out bad again and end up hurting you.

    This life is mine
    I choose how to live it
    and who shares it with me

    ^ I thought this stanza was really well written and the message is very strong. I can absolutely agree to it, everybody is free to chose what they want to do with their life and who should be a part of it. I am really happy that this possibility exists and I think that this is a good centre for your poem.

    The fact that you come back to the stanzas you started with gave the reader to finish the poem, without thinking that there would be something missing or if it wasn't finished.

    Overall I think this is a well written poem.

  • 12 years ago

    by yogi73

    Ahh...reminds me of younger years

    The fire has sparked my soul
    and the adventure begins.

    muy bueno taco!!

    love it

  • 12 years ago

    by lOsT sOuL

    I love this piece.. it inspires to move on..even though ur having a hard time... great work ..love the way u have expressed ur feelings..:) i am going to add this in my favorites...:) good job :) 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Captain Lonesome

    Nicely done, it is full of emotion and hope, it provides the reader with a wonderful bright feeling, awesome job! :-)

  • 12 years ago

    by Aaron

    The way you wrote these words, were very hmm, what word can i use?

    All i can think of is amazing but i really like you're poems.

  • 12 years ago

    by BlueJay

    I think that this piece is excellent, great job. I would say more, but Jenni beat me to most of it. :) Though can I by chance give this a 10/5 instead of a 5/5?

  • 12 years ago

    by Bobby

    I think that is what makes the ride so interesting is the fire that stokes us along that path. This is stunning wording that reflects what we each desire in our adventure called love

  • 12 years ago

    by Jeremy S Farley

    Great poem. I really like this one. I've felt that way myself many times when fate gives purpose. You it into words so well