Comments : Times Confusion

  • 12 years ago

    by yogi73

    I think this is one of your most open/deepest poem. way to put it out there!

  • 12 years ago

    by believeinlove87

    I love this girl.

    I'm scared to love
    I'm scared to care
    but I feel
    I'm scared to be alone forever
    I'm scared to lose myself
    I'm scared to fall
    I'm scared of getting hurt
    What is it that scares me
    because I can't figure it out.

    -Favorite(: Everybody can relate to this poem so well. It flowed perfectly and you could feel what you felt
    <3
    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by lOsT sOuL

    This is really a good poem... covered with all emotions and feelings... epress everything you are feeling... but i think you should have made it little bit more questionable... kinda like asking question to uself and trying to find the answers with urself...that would have made this poem a perfect peiece..it's good right now but it would had got even better..

    I'm scared,
    why?
    and of what?

    In this 1st stanza you are asking question with urself.. and that is a great start..

    I'm scared to love
    I'm scared to care
    but I feel
    I'm scared to be alone forever
    I'm scared to lose myself
    I'm scared to fall
    I'm scared of getting hurt
    What is it that scares me
    because I can't figure it out.

    check out in the 2nd stanza... instead of using I'm if you had asked question by using why i'm it would have been better like

    Why I'm scared to love
    Why I'm scared to care
    but I feel
    Why I'm scared to be alone forever
    Why I'm scared to lose myself
    Why I'm scared to fall
    Why I'm scared of getting hurt
    What is it that scares me
    because I can't figure it out.

    In this moment right now
    I feel lost
    I don't know what I want.
    I feel alone
    I feel numb.
    but I'm not.

    Time
    seems to have stopped
    I'm frozen
    Why can't i move forward
    but then again
    time moves so fast
    Why can't i keep up.

    I wonder what my purpose in life is?
    but I don't want to dwell
    because it's a waste of my time.
    So I'll move on
    because life is short
    so I shouldn't worry
    I should be happy
    so I should live
    because death can come at anytime.

    I'm a little confused
    but I'll be fine
    it's just a matter of time.

    It's just my suggestion..:) overall ur poem is great..:) i loved ur way ..:) 5/5