I have to admit that I don't like this poem as much as I liked previous one. Your thoughts seem to be jumping from one image to another rather than develope smoothly. I think that the emotions are strong and really saddening, but I would prefer it if the images were more enjoyable because now the reader has to get from one to the other without the possibility of grasping it. I think it just needs a bit editing and then it'd be way better. I'm sorry.

I agree with Jenni it is a bit confusing but good overall :)

It is a niece piece which if vanished will come out amazing.
I especially liked these two lines
"I wish i could throw in the towel"
"but my heart still deems it as foul"

It expresses well the increase of the strenght of uncertainty as time passes with no true change of status, and the immense desperation for resolution!! thas what i got out of it, you did an excellent job!

It expresses well the increase of the strenght of uncertainty as time passes with no true change of status, and the immense desperation for resolution!! thas what i got out of it, you did an excellent job!

This is a very good expressed poem greatly detailed and very good... I loved it and enjoyed reading it... Fantastic job 5/5

I like it :)

OMG!!! This is lovely! I love how it seems like sweet torture to part with a loved one. This poem has a nice beat to it, it's musical. Great work!