OMG!!!!!!!! OMG!!!!!!!! OMG!!!!!!

Look, you may get shocked with what I'll say... This is definitely amazing (though there are some 'tiny lines/verses' that seemed off) with its flow, and those pauses that make my hormnone levels shoot to the sky :p lol..

okay, this is definitely an inspiring write. DARK and SUSPENSEFUL.
The first two stanzas are perfect.

The 3rd and 4th need some changes in structure. There is some repitition.. you can manage to tie it up.

But, I love this poem with its raw pace and charm ...

Nominated the next week. please pm me as a reminder. yes, plz :)

FIVE

Wow this is really goood and interesting kinda but awesome and great read i loved it :) :) 5/5

Nice dark write. Done with imagination and creativity. It was a joy to read.

Amazing dark write!
couldnt have done better myself!

i hope to see more soon ^_^

a pleasure to read, i wanted it to be longer

5/5 from me
wouldnt change a thing