Comments : Contagious laughter

  • 13 years ago

    by Jenni

    I really like the idea behind this poem and it shows what impact something as simple as a laughter may have on people around you. That's why I prefer to always smile and laugh, which obviously doesn't always work but I try at least.

    But back to the poem: I'd recommend you to remove the dots at the end of every second verse, they are not necessary and have something depressing to them, in my opinion.
    I like your choice of words, rhyme and flow though it could be even better.

    Overall I think this poem definately has potential and is a great start.

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