Comments : Autumn Air

  • 11 years ago

    by East Poetry

    A beautifully written poem with a powerful ending.
    I really liked it.

    only one line didnt fit though

    The cigarette burning my throat,

    the poem talks so much about the wonderful details of the place and moment. then all of sudden a cigarette is burning your throat.
    is that a good thing.

    Also, I think in the poem the word cause, you meant to write caused.

    Still a beautifully written poem.