This reminds me of a lot of yhe poems you've been highlighting in MM, very raw, very truthful, very strong. Unless this was done on purpose, lifeless has no hyphen :)

I like how you had repetition with a spin, a new idea each time, a new strong and thoughtful emotion. You've been writing lately with such honesty and vulnerability.. I absolutely love it!!

Wow. 5/5.

There's a few spots where I thought you could add a period, or perhaps an 'it' that should have been 'its' or something minor, but aside from that, I think this spoke volumes and is one of my favorite poems from you to date.

Sometimes things happen for the best, & help you in realizing such things and discovering your feelings. I think you've penned something quite beautiful here and have showed us a new side of you. I will nominate this next week, because as you know I somehow nominated a different poem that I didn't mean to. Woops.

Well done! You're evolving into an amazing poet more & more each day.

Yaki.. your pieces are always mesmerizing and show great talent. I'm inspired now..

Perfect way in the metaphors and in defining what you wanted to say.
Simply, amazing.