U kept it short ,simple and vry emotional..and it touches the heart of the reader..bt i think u shud have atleast one or two stanzas to give it a suitable length,
Ful points

I like it, but this is where our path ends
It's repeated in every stanza and sometimes it gives the feeling like its force. Perhaps just use it in two stanzas to make it's point and to not make it feel force and To allow the reader to get caugh in the rest of the poem that is full of emotion.
I also like the ending. Well done.

I like the repetition in the poem and you really made emotions shine through 5/5

This poem is amazing. I really enjoy your work. I love that all your poems tell a story that I can relate to.