Comments : Lonely Hearts

  • 12 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Do you know how stupid I feel, sitting here at the bus stop crying?
    The amount of people asking if I am okay, I swear they don't believe when I say am fine.

    That's how much you made me feel with your words, so emotional, sad and hopeless, imagery was strong and wow.

    I'll say that if you remove the capital letters not needed at each line, it will read smoother. And is a typo in the last line.
    Otherwise awesome piece girl.

  • 12 years ago

    by L

    Heart made of glass
    your made of stone...

    This two lines says too much.

    I agree with Tara's comment. The capital letters are not needed at each line. But i'm also guessing that you wrote this piece in your phone that's why the capital letters at each new line.

    This piece has so much emotion and its sad. amazing write.

  • 12 years ago

    by Liliana

    Eventually put myself out there
    You turned the other way
    Such a sad story that
    Brings us to today

    My favotite :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Lioness

    Oh I love this sad and heartfelt poem!

    The first stanza is so amazing. Glass and stone... Your heart can easily break but his... No emotion

    To talk about strong emotions evolving from somewhere hidden makes me believe you were just hurt and you did not want to get hurt again with this love...

    But eventually you did. Living in an emotional hell

    I love this poem

    x

  • 12 years ago

    by DeviousCharmer

    U can feel the emotions perfectly :)