Comments : Lyrical Existance (Collab with Innocent Fairy)

  • 12 years ago

    by Innocent Fairy

    This was really fun to write with you came out nice and I think it's amazing and I hope others like it as well,,just really enjoyed writing it thanxs :)
    I think it's a 5/5 :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Ingrid

    This was filled with enthusiasm and magic. To have that kind of love can make the difference in someone's entire existance. The icing on the cake:)

    Well done, you two:)

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 12 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Wow! This poem is beautiful.... I was mystified! The title was lovely and caught my eye... and the pictures you painted in this poem was amazing, I envisioned the imagery and it was fantastic. I didn't even realize it was a collaboration until the end, and this is a realllly GREAT collaboration. It flowed really well and I couldn't tell at all. I really love the metaphors you've written... like this part:

    "I savor the nectar of your kiss
    yearning for more, absorbing your warmth
    A kaleidoscopic of colors twirl round me
    as fairy dust glistens on my skin."

    "Our hearts shall dance in the milky way
    and the galaxies in space."

    All I can say is BEAUTIFUL!!! Well done you two!!! =D

  • 12 years ago

    by Cinnamonspice

    What a lovely collab. It's sensitive and delicate as a love poem should be. Its mixed with the awesome image of galactic beauty. Nice flow, awesome wording

  • 12 years ago

    by mandy

    It's nice to read such an uplifting poem. Great use of words, 5/5!

    mandy :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Lioness

    What a beautiful, lovely, romantic poem that you have both written here.

    Each stanza shows so much love and the use of the words here are wonderful.

    I love how you used the words "Fairy Dust" as if it were Innocent Fairy herself!

    I felt a sense of warmth when reading this poem. It's like a poem about first love and the feelings you get when you fall in love for the first time.

    With open arms I embrace you .
    Smiling as my heart takes wings.
    I savor the nectar of your kiss
    yearning for more, absorbing your warmth
    A kaleidoscopic of colors twirl round me
    as fairy dust glistens on my skin.
    Sweet eternity is my wish with you.
    ^^^^^^^^^^^^^
    I love this stanza - my fav one of the poem. I love the words kaleidoscopic colours - mirrored love!

    x

    Well done to the both of you!