Comments : Do it

  • 12 years ago

    by Mello193

    Do it please you when im hurt- this doesnt make sense mostly
    do it please you when i cry- again
    do u ever think that your
    the reason why cant u see
    i haven't smile in awhile
    but since im here let me
    tell you..you the only
    reason of my tears
    you the reason for
    fears of loving
    trusting!

    well you have a knack for bad grammar and things of that nature. i dont wanna diss you just give helpful hints to improve so dont get me wrong. you should however learn proper stanza format. and grammar. then you can show off your writing talent

  • 12 years ago

    by deejay211

    Would u like to demonstrate