Comments : Texas Flood (Drown my Heart)

  • 12 years ago

    by Mattias Ostling

    I loved this poem. And I loved the comparisson between crying and a flood. Especially how the turned into snowflakes to symbolize distance and loneliness.
    I was wondering about the line "(Since the tears came)" is it really necessary? It makes it a lot easier to understand, but clarity isn't always a good thing, in my opinion. I absolutely love the two last stanzas, however, I'm not sure about the stress on "ever". It makes it kinda staggered to read at the end. The stress on "nothing" is great, however!

    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Jess

    Beautiful!!:D
    Your Words Were Effortless, And Perfectly Fit Together.
    I Love Your Style Of Writing! <3
    This Poem Was Exspecually Special In My Life Because Of Your Line When You Said "Watching On The Sidelines".. I Feel Like That All The Time.. Loved It:) 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    There's -nothing- you can do
    to ever make me stop
    drowning myself
    in these Texas floods
    for you.

    *This was my favorite part. I can really relate to what you're saying here. Very emotional write. Keep it up hun. *hugs* -Nik