woah..that story kept completly captivated. u should become a author!

Good story, never got bored. I see you have a 2nd part, so I am going to go read it. Great job!

~rolo

wow you are a real good writer i love all of your work

WOW THAT WAS.....HEAVY. ITS A REALLY SAD STORY BUT ALSO A REALLY GOOD ONE. KEEP IT UP I'LL READ YOUR SECOND PART DON'T WORRY. SPEECHLESS!!
LOVE, JACQUELINE JIMENEZ L.O.L

... About to read part 2..

An uber witty story great job amazing stuff