"Girl please listen to what I have to say........................."

--- I enjoyed the starting sentence.

"Baby, I've been listening to these rainbow love songs like I've been eating skittles one by one."

--- I loved the comparison about skittles and the love songs.

"Please will you let me end my night with you every night by leaving you, my love scares has if we were recreating our love heart on a lovers tree."

-- I think you meant to say AS instead of HAS.
By scares do you mean that it leaves a mark on the love? if so then I think it should be Scars..Though I'm not sure.

"Your beauty gives me sore eyes that tells me your my special little star and I'm painting my love in your heart. Your love has sent me paralysed while I'm standing in the pouring purple rain but you are the only lasting anecdote"

-- In this one, do you mean anecdote or antidote. But either one didn't make sense to me. Could you explain it to me?�¨

"I'll run through land mines and wars to get to the other side, WHY? that I don't know, but some how you already know. When we are together we are mirrored like Walt Disney as the world seems to move beneath are feet"

--- in here, the "beneath are feet" should be beneath OUR feet. :)

"I am at my desk writing these love poems as a passenger on my way searching for greedy love who doesn't want to share you with anyone, including the one above as my LOVE FOR U is greedy and all alone"

---Greedy love.. I never thought about that.. It sounds more like obsession than love. But I do agree with the title.. Falling in love is not foolish. Its the greatest feeling as long as is healthy.
good job.

Here are my suggestions on how to improve the poem :

Girl, please.
Listen to what I have to say..

I've been listening to these rainbow love songs
like I've been eating skittles one by one.

Please, will you let me end my night with you?
Every night by leaving you, my love scars
as if we were recreating our love heart on a lover's tree.

Your beauty gives me sore eyes
that tells me you are my special little star
and I feel like painting my love in your heart.

your love has sent me paralyzed
while I'm standing in the pouring purple rain
but baby, you are the only lasting anecdote.

I'll run through land mines and wars to get to the other side,
WHY? that I don't know, but some how you already know.

When we are together we are mirrored like Walt Disney
as the world seems to move beneath our feet.

I am at my desk writing these love poems as a passenger on my way
searching for greedy love who doesn't want to share you with anyone,
including the one above as my LOVE FOR U is greedy and all alone.

Thanks for your comment I appreciate it. It was my first poem and it was not thought through enough but more or less I free styled this poem just to get a poem chalked on the board.

Hey!
Well done, I enjoyed it alot more. By editing your piece you filled the sentences with more information and thus it makes more sense.
I so like the ending. And overall the poem flows better.

Thanks a lot, i'll try to be more direct with my future poems and thanks to you for pointing out minor alterations.

Really enjoyable uplifting beautiful read.
The love is so warm and pouring out of this piece.
I love the metaphors and the imagery.
You did a wonderful job.
5/5