Comments : Desperate Cries Of Life

  • 12 years ago

    by Tangerine

    "A desperate plea for life

    As everything...
    is dead inside."

    That was a gloomy way to end your poem, which is great! It always amazes me how one can easily write poems about death, pain and depression. It's like the words just come out naturally and they fall on the right places, weird.. but kool :D

  • 12 years ago

    by average thoughts

    I jus luvd it..fp

  • 12 years ago

    by Lioness

    Well this certainly is a very dark poem. Very raw indeed.

    Such heartache shown and some of the parts are scary in the sense of the emotions depicted (I hope you are ok)

    I love how the first stanza is semi-repeated in the end. Defining the meaning and making it stronger.

    I read this poem as being about someone who has a very low self - esteem and see's themselves as being dark and meaningless.

    They do not give themselves value.

    They feel dead inside and there is an emptiness that seems cannot be filled. The imagery is very descriptive and deep.

    There have been days where I felt like this.

    Well done

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