We all have people lost too young and this poem is explicit and revealing in its truth. Thank's Paul. I like it.

(Now can someone write a poem about all those people who survive who we could do with falling under a bus?)

I totally love this poem!! it is wonderful

Wow, just wow. a masterpiece.

Wow, just wow. a masterpiece.

Wow, just wow. a masterpiece.

Well written... such a beautiful poem

Thats a simply stunning write Paul..so full of the emotions of loss.. :) x

Hey paul it destiney wow like im cry it will remaind me of my nanny

Awww :( this reminds me of my gtandma, this is a really good poem paul I liked it alot :) good job 5/5

Splendid. Very splendid! Your piece here is written perfectly and full of meaning...I like the way you tell the message of your poem..the description is well-penned.---With paper in hand,
i froze and traveled through time,
reminiscing on every bit of happiness of her
i could find in my mind---in this part you trying to reminisce the memoirs of the person you love..
---I tried to remain strong,
convincing my mind i was a man
while fighting,
trying to hold back the urge to cry---at first it is so difficult to think about that someone you really love will be gone and never come back again--the expression here is well-written..

---My imagination portrays
a clear picture of my Angel,
whose presence i feel,
whose life has been cut short

I envision her with translucent wings,
a halo on her head,
bright and shiny,
watching me from above---i like the your imagery here, very brilliant! I clearly pictured out in mind the scene you want to prevail here..good write..

---She will never grow old anymore,
nor witness the fruits of her labor,
or understand her purpose on this earth---well, death is inevitable..and no one will never over come death someday...life has an end--all we have life span--great description.

---She leaves questions un-answered
but one thing i know
is that she suffers no more--i love the way you end your part here--very amazing and the message is meaningful--over all--perfect!
deserve of
5/5-C

Aww.. thank you for writing this :) definitely going to my favorites

Hmm wow
idk what to say this poem is really gr8
i can relate to it

"With paper in hand,
i froze and traveled through time,
reminiscing on every bit of happiness of her
i could find in my mind"

good start, i like the image in the 2nd line really gr8 like u could go to past or future,love it

"I tried to remain strong,
convincing my mind i was a man
while fighting,
trying to hold back the urge to cry

My imagination portrays
a clear picture of my Angel,
whose presence i feel,
whose life has been cut short"

wow this is so emotional part,have gr8 imagery in it , trying to make your self strong
while your cries want to go out but u still fight them
and you image your Angel,feel the presence
and remember that her life been cut short
totally amazing part

"I envision her with translucent wings,
a halo on her head,
bright and shiny,
watching me from above

She will never grow old anymore,
nor witness the fruits of her labor,
or understand her purpose on this earth"

the description u gave was fitting in words and everything wings and halo ,shiny and bright watching you from above wow that is amazing

and here still the sad emotion as strong as it is in all the poem that she wont gain what she planted or know why she existed
well i have other idea at that point cause, i believe when die when our purpose here is done, good few lines

"She leaves questions un-answered
but one thing i know
is that she suffers no more"

well i suggest that u put not answered instead of
un-answered would be better

gr8 ending leaving me speechless
here i think u kinda let go of the sad spirit
while u think that she is is a better place than the one u are in

overall gr8 write really enjoyed 5/5 keep writing =)

I believe the fruits of her labor may not have been composed in her earthy life, but that she is enveloped in the joys of her labors in heaven.
Great poem.

Beautil stanza this 'She leaves questions un-answered
but one thing i know
is that she suffers no more'

There's no time to be happier here. Within Death, there is no problem.