Comments : Creepy Hollow

  • 8 years ago

    by Indian Comma Bean

    Interesting, I was very pleased with the vocabulary in this piece. I find a lot of the nature poetry I read these days to be a bit overbearing, but I find the flow of each stanza works very well with your words. However, there were a few places where I expected a pause, but found myself choked up by the lack of a comma.

    Persistently echoed in the night tide
    The nightingale chirps euphonious

    I would insert maybe a comma or even a period after tide, that was one place in particular I found myself pausing and pondering.

    The constant rhythm became a little much, but I found it a very soothing read none the less. Bravo.

  • 8 years ago

    by Yakori bint Muhammed

    Thanks for the inspiring comment, much appreciated. Stay blessed.