Comments : Believer

  • 12 years ago

    by Chelsey

    There was good meaning behind this poem!....What I noticed was your repition . Sometimes repeating words , which you did with "every day" and "I", takes away the readers attention towards the poem. Substitute it for new words or rearrange your sentence and the stanza will sound better.

    Also, don't capitalize every letter. Figure out where you really need commas. Sometimes you can just use a whole sentence like this:

    The cat like to run
    across the street wildly.

    ^ people enjoy reading poems like , its just easier to read.

    Other than that, good work. I like the ideas you have behind your poems!