Comments : A Mist of Light; for survival

  • 12 years ago

    by CuteThingsGoneWrong

    It was interesting :3 I didnt know really what to think of it but i liked it. It was different and it felt like a really interesting piece... It moved me in a way i was quite unsure how to describe. Thank you for sharing it :3

  • 12 years ago

    by Lioness

    A calm gasp in
    a warm breath out;
    there I've got
    a mist of light shimmering
    deep within my chest...
    though I feel so hollow,
    so empty, so lonely.
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    I love this opening hun. I really do! There is this beautiful image of light shimming in your chest but then to mention that you feel so empty - so very sad
    Bare of contentment-
    I strive to enjoy the
    frail tremor of the
    foggy beams attempting
    to fill me up, as it wheezes
    into the silence rusting
    indoors.
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    I see this as you trying to feel this shimmering light inside you as it tries to fill up the empty space that is there. Another sad stanza

    or for the moon to shine
    tomorrow night;
    for me and...me

    Not like there's anyone else,
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    This is the saddest part to read. The fact that the moon is shinning and you want it to shine for you and someone else but since there is no one  I love how you have portrayed that. You so deserve the moon to shine even if it just for you but you also deserve to have someone to love and not to feel lonely.

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    with a calm gasp in,
    a warm breath out;
    there I've got
    a mist of light shimmering
    deep within my chest...

    A haze of hope, I guess.
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    A haze of hope? Not even full hope for some light that has gotten inside you. Oh even there is hope it is something that we can hold onto. I love this

    The words are heartbreaking and each stanza is more sad than the next. You can feel the emptiness and loneliness in this poem

    A well written poem babe

    x

  • 12 years ago

    by Decayed

    Girl, that is a asdasdgssdsgtadfafd piece and what a way to end!!!

    Like the music says, I felt a little bit confined by your words, it's like taking medication!

    The song is 6:44 minutes, 2insa ya m3allem... connection zbele :S

    But oh, anyway, I'm totally struck by this piec.e

  • 12 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Mmmm, I don't know what to say here Nana,
    I sort of am too speechless to convey my thoughts, this stirred some strong emotions in my heart.
    The last part sort of reminded me of a friend, who has been the best girly I need right now, and it was sort of sad yet enlightning at the same time

    I don't know what else I can say, except wow,
    you know how to write emotions

    and I know how to feel them :)

    love
    xxx