Hey,

This poem really makes you think about life.

Your first stanza especially made me think.

Sometimes my name has no point
like I don't belong
nor in heaven nor on earth
I can't see myself shining
live is a heavy coat, tears in all pockets
I want to be one of millions vanished
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It is sad that you feel that your name has no point and that you don't belong. The in the last line you say you want to be one of millions vanished. I wonder, if you feel already that your name has no point, would you already feel you have vanished? This really made me think about the depth of emotion that has come through to me from this write. An amazing write!!!

Well done :)

x

Thanks for comments
sometimes I seek back to a mood in my soul, this a moment of fatigue, when I am really tired I think in blue moods.

oh I even made a mistake

You are a wonderful poet, Ole.
Even though there is a bit of a language barrier, your feelings really shine through.

Please help with the language I you want, that could be fun

Ole :)
Very nice poem, indeed.

Here is a suggestion:
the first 'nor' should be 'neither'.

Hi Thanks
I am listning to all advice and correct mistakes
Ole