"It's hard to breathe knowing she dangles my heart near her feet close to the ground she can crush it without a sound or realize that we can have something profound "

I really love your wording as I already told you that I love the flow in your writings..... This one is a good one and I can understand the feeling...i just like how you worded it :)

"Don't know if the feelings will be accepted be rejected once again this feelin has injected itself rushing through my veins she continually passes through my brain"

For someone who likes rap.. I'm really taking a liking into your verses here its so nice that up there is awesome wording once again :) I could say a lot of things about the words in here and the way you put them together all nicely. . . . but I think you get the jist of it.. :D Nice work..keep writing and keep postin :)

I love the word choice you have made and it is a good meaning and a strong message great job 5/5