Sorry these are late :) I've only just noticed your reply in the request section lol. now onto business.
I really like this poem, even though it speaks of a disheartened feeling we all get at some stage, it has a nice vibe to it, its different from other poems too so thats always a plesant thing to see. along with the repative words you used the flow of this piece made them sound so, fitting, this is a strong poem.
"Cant crawl my body is broken
my words fall short
blackness covers me
nothing in the darkness, i am nothing
coldness steals my breath
fire burns my soul
i know I'm in hell, fire fire fire
escape is gone, hopeless, lost hope"
I like this part, it has a vivid imagery to it. kudos.
I can understand ur feelings...the helplessnes and darkness" reflected in ur write..described nd writen on paper by pure raw emotions ! the quality makes it really touchin,penetrates deep in heart.May u find the lights and blessed ! This was an amazing write ! Keep writin...!