Comments : I am Nothing

  • 8 years ago

    by XxTeArSxX17

    Nice

  • 8 years ago

    by Xionide

    Sorry these are late :) I've only just noticed your reply in the request section lol. now onto business.

    I really like this poem, even though it speaks of a disheartened feeling we all get at some stage, it has a nice vibe to it, its different from other poems too so thats always a plesant thing to see. along with the repative words you used the flow of this piece made them sound so, fitting, this is a strong poem.

    "Cant crawl my body is broken
    my words fall short
    blackness covers me
    nothing in the darkness, i am nothing

    coldness steals my breath
    fire burns my soul
    i know I'm in hell, fire fire fire
    escape is gone, hopeless, lost hope"

    I like this part, it has a vivid imagery to it. kudos.

  • 8 years ago

    by Rachit Bhanage

    I can understand ur feelings...the helplessnes and darkness" reflected in ur write..described nd writen on paper by pure raw emotions ! the quality makes it really touchin,penetrates deep in heart.May u find the lights and blessed ! This was an amazing write ! Keep writin...!