Comments : What You Don't Understand

  • 12 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Venting is good,
    I like the layout here, it sort of makes the flow smoother, and deepens the emotion...

    and the repitition works really well here...

    But I will care, wait, try, and cry
    only because I hold the answers
    to those whys.

    ^^^^^^^^^^^
    I'd suggest one thing, change it to this:

    But I will care,
    I will wait, try and
    I will cry,
    because only I hold the answers
    to why.

    To me, it has better flow, I kind of got lost at the end in the wording.

    However, A great piece Meme :)

  • 12 years ago

    by believeinlove87

    I love this hun<3

    beautiful words flowing straight from the heart. I feel this way about my ex. Asking yourself why you should wait or even care after all hes done to you. But knowing deep down inside your heart the answer; as much as you don't want to believe it.

    This is such a touching honest poem. :)
    Yet another great one!<3
    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    This is really different, but amazing. I liked the format and it was definitively a powerful piece.

  • 12 years ago

    by Lioness

    Hun this is a very unique poem here.

    I love the way it is set out, something different and new!

    To me it's like asking all these questions that are going on in your head, the way it flows makes me think that you are in need for these answers sooner than later as you are trying to move on with your life. I can feel a certain urgency in the way you have written it and the words expressed.

    Some of these questions I have asked myself a number of times in my different relationships. I think there are other people out there who will be feeling some of the way you are feeling as well.

    I love that this poem is different! It's refreshing!!!

    x

  • 12 years ago

    by Decayed

    I almost felt I was reading lyrics of a song.. brilliant piece, and the shape is great.

  • 12 years ago

    by Yakori bint Muhammed

    This is absolutely beautiful and emotionaly sad but assuring. It is relatable to anyone, not neccessarily a heartbreaking relationship. It applies to happy lovers and in marriages too.

    Everyone one way or the other compromises his or her little part of happines to have an understanding and peaceful home regards to marital cases. Reason been, you only know why you tolerate such irrational acts thus the partner also can't risk loosing you too.

    So same also applies with lovers. I like the style you used, gives it that unique element it requires. You write beautifully always, very inspiring. Keep it up dear, Mashallah. Blessings, love you shweety. xxx :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Boy

    Why should I wait ..
    .. when it was only me who bled
    .. when you decided to move ahead
    .. when you ignored the words I said
    .. when you have new plans instead

    my fav stanza.. i realy love it this poem relates to me... great work