Didnt particularily like this one, maybe it just isn't my taste though. Please capitalize your I's!!

If you want to dominate and be in the mind of someone...whether in a bad way or a good way.
the most powerful tool at your disposal, more powerful than how much money you make, or what car you drive, or how handsome you are...

.... is actions... actions speak louder than all!!

I like the flow and formatting of this poem, fun to read.