Oh the beauty within this pretty pretty piece is out of this world.... the nature tones and display of elegant wording is priceless.... what an elegant love poem... I could feel the two of you walking...side by side and I could visualize the happiness.... I love this poem...truly beautiful..

This was so enchanting...like something from an old movie (and I mean that in a good way). With the way the world is at the moment it was very refreshing to read something that was so elegant and innocent...thoroughly enjoyed it!

You may want to correct some little symbols that appear in this verse ..something to do with your software I think.

Yakori, This was beautiful and worded in such an enchanting way, amazing imagery too

My only critique is that you don't capitalize each line as it takes away the flow, makes it read as single line sentences which it isn't and also to include some punctuation to help the reader but otherwise:

a really lovely piece which I love,
so beautiful.

xxx

An absolute delight to read. Such beauty is usually created with paint or a framed piece of work.
But this is beauty within the confines of your mind thanks for sharing it with us. Beautiful

Beautifully worded... and the vibes are quite mesmerizing.. lovely, Yakori. This was an amazing part:

We stand at the entrance under the rickety porch;
a shade guarding us from impending rain.
My gown billows towards him;
and l sense his shivers like an appetizer.

^ To me, it feels so real, I mean the scenery.. quite brilliant!

You have a really beautiful way of saying things, really poetic and very descriptive. I like how you added colors and scents, because it makes the words come alive and it appeals to the readers senses.

Well done,

5/5 Ingrid

Well I was going to copy and paste my favorite stanza. Which was the third one, but the more I kept reading the more stanzas I kept liking! Your chose of descriptive words was great all throughout your poem! I love what you have created here! :)

Hi there, i really like Down the Lane, Yakori.
next time when i have more time i'll
read some more of your work.

all the best

celia