You really know how to put over a scene that the reader is able to enjoy. I felt I was there in that bus:) almost got a headache from the noise. Bro great job of creating the images of reality . Awesome

Definitely some great images,,, made me want to throw up too!!!

Well done!!!

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Wow ya u really know how to draw images for the reader:)
Gd job:)

Very interesting, and descriptive, I loved it :)

You communicated your paradigm so greatly that i believed it to be my own.
I particularly enjoyed the second-last stanza, as it concluded the preceding stanzas beautifully.
Well done, keep up the good work.
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I definitely didn't want this poem to end, I felt like I was reading a good book! You're imagery was great here...I find it sad the drugs, the alcohol, the poisons that turn everyday good people into monsters...it happens everywhere. People have lost respect for themselves and let themselves go..

Lol@ Liz.."made me want to throw up to" lol...that's what you do to your readers Mattias, you get them really involved in Your poetry.