Please don't ever leave
If you do I promise to run after you
Ha ha. I would do the same, it's cute! It's appealing, warm-hearted, sincere and reassuring. Those are all the things a typical girl likes. :P I'm sure the person you wrote this for would love to read this. ^_^ I do know this feeling all too well!
I love this poem. I love the idea of lost love coming back and possibly giving you a second chance.
7 years ago
by Lifeless Doll
Awww how sweet, lovely poem, flawless :)
7 years ago
by Tara Kay
I want to leave some constructive criticism on this piece.
While the poem shows your love and emotion for this person, it lacks direction...
First off, the lack of punctuation makes the poem loose its flow...due to us not being able to read the poem in the way you intend.
and it seems cliche in parts...while it has potential, a couple of changes would do well to direct it
But a nice intentional piece that gets the message across.
Its sweet to the ears. Such confidence in declaring you're the best she can have. And such guts to ask her to elope with you. There's this innocence attached to this piece that got me smiling. The message is clear but a little more polish will give it a poetic touch. Keep writing. Cheers! :)