Well matthew hall not a bad poem still needs a lot of work but you have the raw talent i liked this poem you described the emotion of revenge well. you wrote it well and structured the poem well. keep writing

Pretty good, the suspense was great and then at the end revenge.. I liked it.

Very good poem about revenge! Love your style of writing,, You just draw the reader in! :D

Very well done Sir Poet :) ~ Olwin

Its really good, although the one thing I'd change would be try to find a way to stick with a rhyming pattern, it makes the poem flor better and makes it less choppy.

I really loved it, keep up the good work!