"Finally opportunity came
It knocked right on their door
He wanted to plan for a future
But she didn't love him any more"
-> probably the most powerful part of the poem. (in my opinion)

It's a beautiful piece. But I think it would be better if you structured it with more stanzas so it would be easier to read. The flow wasn't perfect but it's a really nice poem. Maybe with just a little editing, it would be.

This deserves a 5/5 :) Keep writing!

-X

What a story!

Very interesting story. Touching. I liked it =)

I agree with all the comments up above this one, this is one of the best poem I have ever read on this site. It truly takes an artist to paint a picture like this, I appreciate when a poet can be poetic but relate a story at the same time.

I love this poem from begin to the end I was absorbed in, although I hate that she left the only true love she knew.

Amazing...

A heart-wrenching ending...this just crumpled my heart. But what you write here is true, maybe due to her past experiences she still has some walls inside of her so she left him...

You told it brilliantly in rhyme...yes, I too was absorbed in it and couldn't help but admire the writer...I commend you.