Shanix, my friend, this is a super-beautiful right you got here! I like how you took off with 'It burns' and the description of 'sulphur' fire, but don't you mean: sulfur?

Sulfur makes me think of the color of the fire. so beautiful..

I need a creater not a moulder.
Need a lover not a laugher.

^ This is really amazing, how you said: creator.
Corrections: creator / molder

This is indeed a good poem, fill with emotions that many have experience. My favorite line is

"My heart is in pain,
I fall for you without gain."

The whole piece is great, but simple meaningful words often make poems better. Love it..

The pain of a broken heart is a deep pain that is expressed b beautifully within this poem.... very nice

The first three lines were great.

Wow..i love t al the way..nyc poem.