This is beautiful. The rhymes and flow were flawless. The repeating lines made this seem like a lyrical piece to be sung.

"the ashed one nine three
of pains painted in poetry"
These lines touched me in a way I can't even explain..

Excellent piece 5/5 Keep writing :)

-X

This is cool :) I like the rhymes and the poem is really dark, good job keep it up