Comments : Roses

  • 12 years ago

    by Xanthe

    "They have purpose.
    Something important,"

    This is a really interesting piece. Perhaps this is about giving importance to roses, they're not made to be cut and given to someone, and just die.. They should also live a long life bringing beauty to this ugly world..

    "Don't take away,
    Like the end of the day."
    Great ending, but I think you should add 'them' between take and away to keep the flow going.

    All in all a great read. Keep writing :) 5/5

    -X

  • 12 years ago

    by RayOfDarkness

    Thanks... I don't particularly like this piece that I wrote though. I personally think my other poems are better... some a least. (: