Comments : Room

  • 12 years ago

    by Xanthe

    "But through the window you can see
    the other side, the happiness
    and the free."
    I suggest you change free to freedom.

    "You can see it but
    you can't touch it. That is the worst
    torture of all."
    I love this part, mainly because I know that feeling.

    Great piece, really powerful. It flowed really well, in my honest opinion. The word choice is also great. Really enjoyed reading this. 5/5 Keep writing.