"Dark grey clouds are dominating the skies
Down on earth, every creature is looking for
a place to hide"
Great start. Immediately bursts with vividly colorful imagery.
"The sky is finally relieved of its earthly
pressure
Releasing pouring waters with all its
pleasure"
Again, great imagery and the rhymes flowed really well.
"Mountain cold raises your body's hair
The smell of grass and rain spreads through
the air"
Love this part. Well chosen words. I can almost feel my arm hairs stand on end..
"Aroaring sound scatters across the
atmosphere
Instantlyfilling your heart with humbling fear"
Love this part. I likened it to some people who cowers in fear when they feel mother nature's wrath. But when it's a beautiful sunny day, they just continue to cut down trees for a 'living', but all they do is shortening our lives as they continue to destroy the earth.
"Followed by a flash of mighty white light
I breathe in this moment of a restless sight"
Yes, it is breath-taking as it is scary.
"It is dark out there, yet so feathery inside
my soul
... This was a long sought break for us all"
Hmm.. the ending is quite confusing and can be interpreted in a lot of ways.
Overall a really amazing piece. Keep writing 5/5 :)