Replace self-harm with something
that line in particular cought my Eye
awsome poem

Very sad, this is a well thought out piece. I feel like you are trying to tell a story of shame that causes you to affict yourself with pains.

Great poem

Oh Jen,

I simply love this poem it is quite sad indeed. There's always a touch of darkness in any poem I find that has self harming involved. This poem has so much emotions. I love the way you have written this. I was enticed from the start to end though of course saddened by the whole thing. I love that you are trying to replace the bad things involved in cutting and changing it to something more positive to take your mind off everything. I love the ending, there was a certain positive feel to it. To say yes you've won this time, that it hasn't swallowed you completely.

Awesome, Awesome write.

x

I like the whole poem from beginning to end, there was just one little sentence that threw me off.

"It may not feel the same but
I'll have to make do"

This one sounded strange, I'll have to make do...

Aside from that one, I found this poem sad and somehow cheerful. Yes, it's a good start to want to leave the cutting behind and say I win. And you know, if people want something and if they put effort then they will achieve it. The thing is to not give up and keep going. It's easy to say and hard to do but that's what makes it totally worth. and much much rewarding.

Great write.

Jen,
I can relate to this, for my past is self-harm and I can say I win...although times are hard.

You can do it, and I've tried these strategies of ridding myself of cutting, so this poem spoke to me in a way that really made me understand your pain.

I love the flow, it was smooth and the wording was simple but the emotion here was evident and this is one of those poems that makes you feel for the writer and I feel for you because I know how it feels, I've been through similar stuff.

Take care girl, and chin up :)
Love always
Tara
xxx

Awesome nd beautiful poem. Spoke 2 me in my shameful addictions. 5/5

Sad, creative..fresh..and flow ws gud..