It's an awesome piece...but try to check in 3rd stanza...something missing???....so far it's great!

Nice

Very sad.

:(

I think that girl is there just hiding until someone finds her. It's a sad piece and the emotion is transmitted to the reader.

I can relate somehow, the tears, the sorrow and feeling like no more smiles will come. :(

WOW that so deep and sad.5

Really sad. like falling from grace really. simply beautiful. Great write. keep up the good work

A nicely penned wright. Brace up and walk tall. Ride on.