Wow. great piece! I love your style to write poem..it is fascinating...the flows and the lines as it goes on..
Uhmmm..just a little mess..try to look tremmbling in the fifth stanza--edit it to trembling...but, as a whole it's great..i enjoy everything on this piece...
Still i vote it 5/5
keep writing more and god bless=)

Thank you crishmerl.....sorry for the error....^_^ its my first time here in this site.....

Thanks!