Comments : Lessons in the dark

  • 11 years ago

    by Yrem Crish

    ^^Hmmm, my insight for this that after a life that full of dreams and hope the persona here feel hopeless because of frustrations and disappointments...she was asking herself why she came that way and what all she knew that she did everything..thought it was right. And then, she realized that she did something wrong when she gradually found the answers of her questions.

    And when you look inside
    You'll see an empty room
    An empty heart, and an empty mind
    An abandoned, empty tomb

    And when you keep on searching
    You'll finally reach the good
    You'll see a box of band-aids
    A hammer, nails, and wood^^It is a nice part..the message is very meaningful...the metaphors of a box with band-aids
    A hammer, nails, and wood...I like the way you wrote that tools to build the persona's self again. Clever write.

    And when the night is over
    What reappears is day
    If you think all that you've done is wrong
    There's nothing left to say

    ^^Well, this is an awesome story, after the hopeless night of emptiness..of frustrations and disappointments..of the wrong things done there is still day to shine on the dark. To give new hope and another day to mend yourself into a better person. I enjoyed reading your stuff. Very amazing!
    5/5-C