Nothing comes true, outside belief. Until you give up, you can win.

I like the message of your poem. I like the imagery too and the ideas you conveys in your poem. It seems simple and direct to the point but I like the details of the persona fighting his life towards enemies---yet, the metaphor about the trials and challenges of life.

within the enemy I'll stand tall,
I'll beat the best and be the best
and I'll be crown within the enemys wall.

Like the imagery here..enemys--should be enemy's wall.
Over all. Great written piece:)
Keep writing",

Love your similes, great poem. 5/5

The rain is falling like I'm going to drown,
the sun is shinning like i'm going to burn,

Awesome and powerful opening, I mean it really gets your point across but in the end, you come out strong! I like it :o

Thanx for the comments...

Really amazing poem :) 5/5

Awesome poem :) 5/5